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tangerine 9 + kiss the girl

Author: hi_falootin
Prompt: Tangerine 9. tiptoe
Extras: Pocky and DOUBLE Malt! prompt from a hat: tiptoe : Dee - kiss the girl
AND sylvrilyn dared me to write something using Dee's favorite color.
Word Count: 100!
Rating: PG (kissing)
Notes: THIS WAS A PAIN TO GET DOWN TO 100 WORDS, LET ME TELL YOU. But I was determined. I don't have an exact time stamp for this, but Dee is around 14-15, I think.



The girl's on her tiptoes, peering out between the blinds.

"Don't worry," Dee says. "Dad knows what he's doing."

She sidles up to the girl––Celia. Celia turns from the window; her shoulder rubs against Dee's breasts.

"So, what? You're supposed to entertain me?"

Dee shrugs, fingering a piece of Celia's purple-dyed hair.

"My favorite color," says Dee.

Celia's voice is low. "You wanna kiss?"

"Okay."

Dee tugs Celia over, kisses her with none of the sweetness expected of girls. Their teeth clack together and Dee shivers, keeps kissing Celia hard until the door swings open and they fall away.





So a lot of the setting got lost when I started ruthlessly cutting it down. I don't know if it's totally clear what's going on but um...I hope it's interesting enough, regardless? If it's confusing, just let me know, and I can explain. Pocky is hard! :O

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ichthusfish
Dec. 10th, 2008 01:42 am (UTC)
Pocky is really hard, but you did this one really well :)

So now I'm wondering who came into the room (maybe the dad), and more importantly, whether they saw anything...
hi_falootin
Dec. 10th, 2008 02:03 am (UTC)
thank you! Yay, I'm glad it worked :D And as to who came in the room...I was just thinking it might be Jason. DUN DUN DUNNN!
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hi_falootin
Dec. 10th, 2008 02:04 am (UTC)
thanks! I like that about Pocky though I imagine it can sometimes be frustrating, hehe
slysionnachnano
Dec. 10th, 2008 02:51 am (UTC)
I like this a lot. Lots said with little words.
hi_falootin
Dec. 10th, 2008 03:26 am (UTC)
ah, TY! <3
fachefaucheux
Dec. 10th, 2008 04:30 am (UTC)
I agree with everyone above, you did a good job paring this down. The last paragraph was especially good. ^__^
hi_falootin
Dec. 10th, 2008 05:51 am (UTC)
aw, thank you! Glad it worked :)
sylvrilyn
Dec. 11th, 2008 02:01 am (UTC)
Ooh! I really like it! Not only did I get my curiosity about favorite color satisfied, but I got girls kissing! :D
hi_falootin
Dec. 11th, 2008 04:05 am (UTC)
yay! I'm glad you liked what I did with the dare, hehe :)
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