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Author: Regret
Rating: G
Challenge: Vanilla #2 - The Sniffles
Extras: Wafer Cookie - a sketch
Word Count: 606
Summary: Simon catches a cold.
Notes: He seems to like FPP, so... more first person present, until I can kick reticent!muse into third person past like, y'know, normal.

Of all the-

I’ve got a cold.

I’ve been sent home from the station - no courier work for poor Simon today, lest he curse the humans with his sniffles and sneezes. You’d Jonathan and Simon, with a handkerchief.think from the ungodly haste with which I was sent packing that, it being my cold, it was somehow more contagious and dangerous than anyone else’s.

So here’s me on my day off work, dancing around my apartment to songs from my ancient computer, and my nose running a marathon. Well, really, my nose isn’t just running , I’m pretty sure it’s sprinting.

Are the alfa supposed to catch human diseases? I never thought to check before…

The knock on my door nearly scares the pants off me. I open it with almost undue haste; it’s not like I’m skiving, I’ve been legitimately discharged! And I’m surprised that it’s Jonathan, my landlord (a very formal way of saying he rents out the spare attic-room he’s got all kitted out for people like me who’re elsewise homeless), with one hand on his hip and a deep frown on his face. “What the hell are you doing?”

“Uh.” Really, there’s not much else you can say when you’ve just been caught dancing around like a particularly tempo-challenged ape and singing your little heart out at the same time. “I’ve got swine flu?” I try a huge, innocent grin, but it’s disrupted by the abrupt sneeze that decides it just can‘t wait. I only just miss Jonathan.

I’m not sure what he looks less impressed by, the excuse or the fact I just nearly sprayed his chest with messy bodily fluids. “I’m trying to sleep, you know,” he says in a pained voice, and now I look at him I notice that his insanely long hair is standing at angles it would normally take a team of professionals hours to achieve, and his eyes have deep, dark marks under them.

I try to look shamefaced, but it’s somewhat disrupted by another sneeze and a sniff that could have hoovered up a goat. “I’m sorry, I’ll keep it down…”

“Please do.” He shakes his head slowly, looking at me like I’m a badly-behaved child he’s got no idea what to do with. “And since I don’t want to catch your cold…” He grabs me by the shoulder, all the better I assume to ensure I can’t flee in panic from him, and pulls a handkerchief from the pocket of his pants. A handkerchief, seriously, who has one of those these days? But since he’s nearly waving it in my face, I figure it’s probably safest to take it rather than run the risk of his ire. If he gets angry enough, he might put up my rent, after all…

“Thank you?” I volunteer, taking it from him gingerly. It doesn’t appear to be used, but you can never tell…

“No problem,” he says, letting go of my shoulder. He’s gripped it hard enough to leave the shape of his fingers in the cloth. Remind me not to annoy him again… “Just keep the noise down. This’s the first sleep I’ve had in ages.”

“Right-o!” I snap off a salute to him, more for the fun of it than anything else, but he’s already shutting the door on me. My hand finishes its arc at my forehead right as the door slams closed, and I feel slightly moronic. Still, can’t be helped. Not my fault he chose to drive trucks the length and breadth of the country, after all…

But I still turn down the music and crawl back into bed to wait out the cold with Jonathan’s white handkerchief.

Comments

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hi_falootin
Sep. 18th, 2009 12:00 am (UTC)
your FFP is fun! don't fight the muse ;) This was quite cute. This line in particular made me smile:
his insanely long hair is standing at angles it would normally take a team of professionals hours to achieve, and his eyes have deep, dark marks under them.

and the picture is adorable!
nothingtoregret
Sep. 18th, 2009 01:58 pm (UTC)
I've got visions of trying to do NaNoWriMo in FFP, and I think 50k words of anecdotal style writing would finally send me loopy. O_o;

Still, so far I've written more in these two days than I have in months, so I think I'll follow your advice. ;)

I'm glad it could make you smile. ^_^
iamintroversion
Sep. 18th, 2009 12:32 am (UTC)
Very cute. :) And the picture is adorable! I like the line about his nose running marathons, best. :]
nothingtoregret
Sep. 18th, 2009 02:00 pm (UTC)
Thank you! ^_^ I've got to admit, that's my favourite line too... ^^;
thebaobabtree
Sep. 18th, 2009 12:44 am (UTC)
hey i like this so far. the drawing is nice too. great job.
nothingtoregret
Sep. 18th, 2009 02:02 pm (UTC)
Thank you! ^_^

I'm oddly happy with the drawing 'cause it really was just a quick sketch and it it came out way better than most of the stuff I take time over. *shakes a fist at it*
etchandetchan
Sep. 18th, 2009 02:15 am (UTC)
Seconding the FPP thing, you worked it really well here. I quite enjoyed it.
nothingtoregret
Sep. 18th, 2009 02:03 pm (UTC)
Aah, the way things seem to be going, everything I write might well end up in it! x__o Can't seem to construct a halfway decent sentence in third any more without deleting it in disgust...

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
nathskywalker
Sep. 18th, 2009 08:30 am (UTC)
I like the natural humor in Simon's narration and feel like it would get lost in third person, so, much to my surprise I agree with Falootin. Don't fight the muse.

The sketch is also really nice although for one moment when looking at it I wondered what was wrong with their ears. Silly fantasy illiterate person that I am... XD
nothingtoregret
Sep. 18th, 2009 02:18 pm (UTC)
I'm really happy that you think so! It's... a little disconcerting that it's the only thing I seem able to write right now, but... I have to admit, I do quite like how his voice is coming along so far. ^^;

Haha, I'd actually kind of hoped that it may be a little bit of a surprise... ^^; I've been trying to write him like a 'regular person' who just happens to have long ears. ^^;
nyghtrain
Sep. 18th, 2009 03:31 pm (UTC)
Aww-this was cute. Simon is really adorable and the handkerchief. I agree with Simon about those, but I see he too it to bed with him. Very adorable. I really like your drawing as well. I am jealous of your art skills.
nothingtoregret
Sep. 18th, 2009 11:07 pm (UTC)
Hehe~ I'm glad you like Simon, and how the handkerchief thing played out. I wasn't expecting it to end as it did (which is probably bad since I'm the writer...) but I think it came out quite sweetly... (I hope ^^; )

Aah, don't be jealous! It's the best thing I've drawn in ages! T__T But I'm really happy you like it! <3
shayna611
Sep. 18th, 2009 05:18 pm (UTC)
You pull off the FPP well - something I will say to very few people - and it suits the character's voice quite well :)
nothingtoregret
Sep. 18th, 2009 11:09 pm (UTC)
It feels a little weird and slightly creepy to be writing like that, to be honest, especially since I spent most of my life writing in third person and can't quite work out what happened...

But I'm really glad you like how it comes out and to be honest I'm oddly happy with it too, for all its oddness. I'm particularly glad you think it suits his voice! Thank you~!
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